Into The Labyrinth (the story) - Discussions

[Terquem]

I suppose it is time to try something different

[Terquem]

If you are reading it and spot any mistakes, please point them out here. What I post is all first draft stuff basically and often simple mistakes get by me.

[amenditman]

I always have to read it twice to make find errors.
First time through is for enjoying the story and characters, I refuse to be distracted by minutia.

[Terquem]

I understand there are some folks who hit errors like giant speed bumps, and cannot help but be distracted, but I am glad you are enjoying it.
It was just a thought, no one should think they have to point out the mistakes

[Mike P.]

Terquem glad you started writing again, I enjoy following the story! Will the Ardonirane supplement influence your work?

[Terquem]

It will I am reading it now, and will be trying to pay attention to what it establishes. I might even go back and edit older references

Thanks for reading!

[Terquem]

As of this moment, the story is largely incompatible with "Ardonirane." I assumed a more wide spread influence of the Thorsz, with control over a significantly larger country. Also, I assumed a different culture entirely. The more I read of Ardonirane the worse it gets.
I'm going to give a lot of thought to if this is even worth correcting.
The best solution I can see is stripping all references to the Thorsz and the death test from the story, or finding a way to edit the story so that Brendun's relationship to the Thorsz is far more obscure and unusual.
I am not sure where to go.

[Terquem]

I am going to finish what I am writing now and complete this chapter. I will not be starting chapter 7 until I have finished reviewing and editing all previous parts for content errors.

Thank you for reading and I hope you liked it.
See you all again soon

[Mike P.]

Terquem: I too imagined Ardonirane to be completly different than what is described in the new supplement. I think what you've done so far is awesome, and I wouldn't worry about back editing to match new material as it is released. Personally I'm enjoying the story as is, and getting to see Cidri through another's perspective is refreshing.

[Terquem]

I am re-posting this story in the original thread it was in - maybe doing another round of edits (I seem to use the word "slowly" far more than I should).
If you have any questions or comments please put them here
Thank you,
David