09-24-2020, 09:32 PM | #41 |
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Re: In The Labyrinth (the story) - Discussions
I suppose it is time to try something different
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09-29-2020, 01:19 PM | #42 |
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Re: In The Labyrinth (the story) - Discussions
If you are reading it and spot any mistakes, please point them out here. What I post is all first draft stuff basically and often simple mistakes get by me.
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09-29-2020, 02:28 PM | #43 |
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Re: In The Labyrinth (the story) - Discussions
I always have to read it twice to make find errors.
First time through is for enjoying the story and characters, I refuse to be distracted by minutia.
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09-29-2020, 02:57 PM | #44 |
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I understand there are some folks who hit errors like giant speed bumps, and cannot help but be distracted, but I am glad you are enjoying it.
It was just a thought, no one should think they have to point out the mistakes |
10-02-2020, 08:55 PM | #45 |
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Re: In The Labyrinth (the story) - Discussions
Terquem glad you started writing again, I enjoy following the story! Will the Ardonirane supplement influence your work?
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10-02-2020, 10:05 PM | #46 |
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It will I am reading it now, and will be trying to pay attention to what it establishes. I might even go back and edit older references
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10-06-2020, 03:30 PM | #47 |
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As of this moment, the story is largely incompatible with "Ardonirane." I assumed a more wide spread influence of the Thorsz, with control over a significantly larger country. Also, I assumed a different culture entirely. The more I read of Ardonirane the worse it gets.
I'm going to give a lot of thought to if this is even worth correcting. The best solution I can see is stripping all references to the Thorsz and the death test from the story, or finding a way to edit the story so that Brendun's relationship to the Thorsz is far more obscure and unusual. I am not sure where to go. |
10-06-2020, 04:35 PM | #48 |
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Re: In The Labyrinth (the story) - Discussions
I am going to finish what I am writing now and complete this chapter. I will not be starting chapter 7 until I have finished reviewing and editing all previous parts for content errors.
Thank you for reading and I hope you liked it. See you all again soon |
10-06-2020, 08:17 PM | #49 |
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Re: In The Labyrinth (the story) - Discussions
Terquem: I too imagined Ardonirane to be completly different than what is described in the new supplement. I think what you've done so far is awesome, and I wouldn't worry about back editing to match new material as it is released. Personally I'm enjoying the story as is, and getting to see Cidri through another's perspective is refreshing.
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06-04-2021, 06:15 PM | #50 |
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Re: Into The Labyrinth (the story) - Discussions
I am re-posting this story in the original thread it was in - maybe doing another round of edits (I seem to use the word "slowly" far more than I should).
If you have any questions or comments please put them here Thank you, David |
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