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Old 02-12-2020, 03:49 PM   #21
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So do you want editing as well as content suggestions?
Or do you do further editing afterwards?
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Old 02-12-2020, 04:03 PM   #22
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I have gone back and done some, little, editing.
I don't think there is a "future" for this work, in terms of publishing, so it is not easy to justify a lot of rework.

But, does it work? I am not a professional writer, and I do not have a formal education in creative writing, so I wonder if I am making simple mistakes in story telling and I don't know it.
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Old 02-12-2020, 04:16 PM   #23
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I'm not a prof writer or even reader either.

I'll take a closer look, aside from enjoying a story set on Cidri.
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Old 02-12-2020, 04:27 PM   #24
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That brings up another concern I have - I keep mentioning things like the Thorzs, and Death Test style dungeons, and in my head the story is set on a "Cidri" inspired world, maybe somewhere north of the Thorzs kingdom, but am I taking too many liberties?

What are other elements of "The Fantasy Trip" that I could emphasize to make it more grounding in the lore?
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Old 02-14-2020, 08:56 AM   #25
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What are other elements of "The Fantasy Trip" that I could emphasize to make it more grounding in the lore?
The various references you've already included are more than enough already maybe even too much, to be honest, because I don't think it's particularly important to Cidrify your setting at all.
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Old 02-14-2020, 09:08 AM   #26
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I did feel, at times, that I was hitting the references a bit too hard
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Old 02-18-2020, 02:41 PM   #27
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Part 27 going up tonight

Part 28 this weekend, and that will end Chapter 4
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Old 03-12-2020, 09:57 PM   #28
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Two parts just added. Part 30 and 31
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Old 03-13-2020, 10:11 AM   #29
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Maybe I should have added only one at a time.

Anyway - thanks for reading.
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Old 03-14-2020, 09:20 AM   #30
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I have gone back and done some, little, editing.
I don't think there is a "future" for this work, in terms of publishing, so it is not easy to justify a lot of rework.

But, does it work? I am not a professional writer, and I do not have a formal education in creative writing, so I wonder if I am making simple mistakes in story telling and I don't know it.
Certainly, 99% of good writers do not have a "formal education in creative writing", for example Homer, Shakespeare and Dostoevsky, and I regard such credentials as more of a negative indication rather than a good thing.
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