In The Labyrinth (the story) - Discussions

[amenditman]

So do you want editing as well as content suggestions?
Or do you do further editing afterwards?

[Terquem]

I have gone back and done some, little, editing.
I don't think there is a "future" for this work, in terms of publishing, so it is not easy to justify a lot of rework.

But, does it work? I am not a professional writer, and I do not have a formal education in creative writing, so I wonder if I am making simple mistakes in story telling and I don't know it.

[amenditman]

I'm not a prof writer or even reader either.

I'll take a closer look, aside from enjoying a story set on Cidri.

[Terquem]

That brings up another concern I have - I keep mentioning things like the Thorzs, and Death Test style dungeons, and in my head the story is set on a "Cidri" inspired world, maybe somewhere north of the Thorzs kingdom, but am I taking too many liberties?

What are other elements of "The Fantasy Trip" that I could emphasize to make it more grounding in the lore?

[FireHorse]

Originally Posted by Terquem

What are other elements of "The Fantasy Trip" that I could emphasize to make it more grounding in the lore?

The various references you've already included are more than enough already — maybe even too much, to be honest, because I don't think it's particularly important to Cidrify your setting at all.

[Terquem]

I did feel, at times, that I was hitting the references a bit too hard

[Terquem]

Part 27 going up tonight

Part 28 this weekend, and that will end Chapter 4

[Terquem]

Two parts just added. Part 30 and 31

[Terquem]

Maybe I should have added only one at a time.

Anyway - thanks for reading.

[DarkPumpkin]

Originally Posted by Terquem

I have gone back and done some, little, editing.
I don't think there is a "future" for this work, in terms of publishing, so it is not easy to justify a lot of rework.

But, does it work? I am not a professional writer, and I do not have a formal education in creative writing, so I wonder if I am making simple mistakes in story telling and I don't know it.

Certainly, 99% of good writers do not have a "formal education in creative writing", for example Homer, Shakespeare and Dostoevsky, and I regard such credentials as more of a negative indication rather than a good thing.