Monster Hunters: Justice (OCC)

[ericthered]

leaving it as is should be fine

[the_matrix_walker]

I added Autohypnosis and a level of the Mystic Talent for skills.

I decided against changing the Vulnerability... He'll be fine without the Power Talent.

[Lamech]

I have GRE's tomorrow so I need to sleep, but I did start tapping up rituals.

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Inspiration
The spell inspiration let's those under its sway fight harder and better. Despite the fact that to the reciepients the spell feels like a mental burden is being lifted and their drive is renewed the effects are physical. ST, DX and HT are all increased, but no more than by 30%. This spell does affect temporary HP and FP totals increasing and decreasing by the same amounts as HT and ST when the spell is cast and ended.
Effects: Lesser Strength Body*3, Area of Effect, Altered Traits, +ST/DX/HT
Typical Casting Lesser Strength Mind*3, [9] 1 Yard Radius [2], 300 lbs [3], 1 month [11] +3 ST/HT/DX [120] Total=145

Brilliance
The people caught in this spells effect are simply put smarter, and more able to see through and withstand coercion or manipulation. The effects aren't hugely obvious. You simply pick out details more often, see through the used carman, or make the logical leap. You almost never have a word on the tip of your tongue. Its optimizing your current brain so you can always be at the top, not letting you accomplish things you couldn't.
Effects: Lesser Strengthen Mind*3, Area of Effect, Altered Traits +IQ/Per/Will
Typical Casting Lesser Mind*3, [9] 1 Yard Radius [2], 300 lbs [3], 1 month [11] +4 IQ/Per/Will [120] Total=145

Brew Healing Potion
This ritual is a simple one that allows the caster to create a healing potion for later consumption. The effects are immediate and obvious, wounds close, bones knit together, and blood is refilled. This an even regenerate lost limbs, or similar crippling wounds if the injury can be completely healed by the potion. The spell can be made into other alchemical items besides just potions. Salves are also common.
Effects: Greater Restore Body, Lesser Create Magic, Healing, Altered Traits: Regrowth
Typical Casting: Greater Restore Body [4] Lesser Create Magic [6], Healing 3d+2, [10] Regrowth [10] Weight [3] Cost=33*3=99

Terrify II
This spell creates horrid frights in the victims mind forcing them to make two fear checks with a penalty equal to their margin of failure on their resistance roll.
Effects: Lesser Control Mind*2
Typical Casting Lesser Control Mind*2 [10] Range 50 yrds [8]

Form of the Valkyrie
The target of this spell transforms their entire body, gaining two powerful wings from their back and their entire appearance changing to be more "ideal", or in game terms gaining levels of appearance. The wings' feathers glow softly in the dark, but as the light gets brighter they glow brighter as well letting the light be seen even in conditions as bright as day. Physicists are not entirely sure how someone stays aloft and are sure it should burn huge amounts of energy, but it doesn't. Especially when the user hovers.
Effects, Greater Transform Body, Altered Traits: Flight (Winged), Appearance, Increased Air Move
Typical Casting: Greater Transform Body [8], Altered Traits Flight (Winged) [30] Beautiful [12], Increased Air Move 5 [10] Weight 300 lbs [3], Accessory: Lights! [1] Duration: 1 day [9]

Armor of the Beserker
Drawn from the ancient tradition of the beserker, men and women can fight under its effects ignoring even fairly serious wounds or blows. Even while it protects them, to all but the most well trained eye it seems the attacks do as much damage as they should, but the victim fights on uneffected. Some stories tell of warriors who are struck by countless spears and arrows, piercing into their flesh while they fight as if unpained and whole of body.
Effects: Greater Strengthen Body [3] DR: Tough Skin, Absorbition+100%, No Sig+20% 9/level. Area of Effect
Typical Casting: Greater Strengthen Body [3], Weight 300lbs [2], Duration 1 month [11], Area of Effect 2yrds [2], 7 DR, (Absorption+100%, Tought Skin, No Sig) [63] Total: 81*3=243

Going for a slightly Norse Flavor

[Talosian]

(Heads up, I'm gonna start underlining key items that need to be seen or answered. Otherwise things get drowned in the mega responses.)

Yeah, this isn't quite raw, but I needed a low reliability and a high skill. I think it should come out fair -- his failures should be unrelated to how hard the request is.

Shiny, sounds good.

Contact group is 10 (its doesn't get the limitations), and I forgot to count elastic skin as an alternate.

D'oh. I was super confused for a bit because I wasn't applying limitations to Contact Group, but I kept getting 8. What happened is that the way GCS handles Contact Groups is off, since it doesn't know to do the group multiplier after calculating a value. It had 1.5 * 5 = 7.5 (round to 8) instead of rounding 1.5 up to 2, then multiplying by five. Dur hur hur. All good now.

Steel will count, but with a lesser effect. Electronic gadgets won't do squat. Many guns will -- though with effort he can get one that won't. large building frames might be a pain.

Oh, bother. Okay, if steel will be an issue, than I'll swap his knives to titanium (and just pretend that there's no iron in titanium alloys) . I don't think there's rules for titanium firearms, so I'll need a ruling on price for that (I'll assume +1 CF, like melee weapons for now). I guess invisible bank robberies are out, alas.

I was thinking more that having once had the position is impressive and marks him as an upper level fae. Changing it to spirit empathy is fine, but specializing in all fae is too broad. Trickster Fae, Near fae, or high fae are valid though.

Alright, I think I will swap it for Spirit Empathy (Trickster Fae). I figure that brownies and most trickster fae don't care about what authority Brown held (if they cared in the first place), and most other fae are unlikely to respect a (former) self-proclaimed trickster king.
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Okay, I have my basically final version done. Lots of minor details have changed, but the most important changes are summarized below:

I needed to do something with the disadvantage points I had left over from the removal of his negative Status, Social Stigma, and Duty, so I rebalanced his disads slightly, and added Delusion (Brown is my Ally) and Enemy (Elven Lord).

I added Delusion because Brown has had years to absolutely bend Jack to his will. Jack knows that Brown is dangerous and would happily cause him problems, but he firmly believes that Brown harbors no actual malice towards him. This means that when Brown tells Jack something about fae or faerie, he'll likely believe him, even if his personal knowledge of the fae contradicts Brown. It also means that Jack is likely to be blindsided by anything especially nasty Brown does, and that he probably won't see Brown's escape coming (and certainly won't expect Brown to come after him).

I ended up going with the version of Jack that has seen and interacted with more of faerie, and the Elven Lord Enemy is one of the ideas that came out of that. The rough concept I have is that Jack was gallivanting around the Elven Court making mischief, and (encouraged by Brown) pulled off a major trick on this Elven Lord, which resulted in significant public embarrassment (alternatively, or in addition, he could have stolen something*. He does that a lot). Jack was seen or otherwise connected to the crime, but didn't initially realize that he'd been found out. After an initial encounter (and escape) or two, Jack realized that he'd made a huge mistake, and he started looking for help. I like this subplot because it gives Jack a direct reason to be coming to a city with other Monster Hunters, and to make allies of them. It also adds some depth to Jack's backstory. I'm not 100% sure if this will work out with your plans, so I've left the details deliberately open ended, and I can definitely remold, recycle, or scrap this if necessary.

*I turned all of Jack's fancy knives into a point of signature gear for convenience, and my 4:00 am brain suggested that Jack had stolen his silverware. I can't decide if this is my best or worst idea ever.

Jack is also getting Conscious Dual Nature. No big surprise here, though, as the idea is super cool.

The only other change that I think needs to be deliberately brought up is that I gave Jack Dual Weapon Attack (it wasn't meant to rhyme, I swear) for his knives. I'm not sure if this will be alright or not (Dual Weapon Attack is fairly yes-no-maybe about its own cinematic-ness), but it's extremely easy to change if it's an issue. The reason I added this is because I realized that I needed to do something to boost Jack's damage potential, or his knives weren't going to work out so well in actual combat (even so, I anticipate that he will spend a great deal of time stabbing things in the eyes). This seemed like the most character-consistent way to make that change.

(Current version of my sheet is up on page 13. Any necessary tweaks shouldn't interfere with starting the game.)
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Mr. H is pretty hard to tick off (UNfazeable) and your annoying but not the serious threat to free will and humanity he is focused on. After all if you trick someone they still have a choice. So probably go with heard or had a minor crossing of paths in the past that neither really thinks about.

Oh yeah. Humm... Okay, how about we say that they briefly met previously, and Jack tried to goad and harass him into a reaction, but Mr. H ignored him until he left. It can be an ongoing goal for Jack to get an emotional response from him XD

matrix, Talosian: Talosian put it well. He'll probably try to find a cure, and be surprised and angry if they don't seem interested in it.

Which definitely won't go over well with Jack, as he has rather acclimated to his situation. Let's have them meet for the first time in play, so that we can watch this drama unfold from the beginning.

Matrix & Lamech: Commentary on character relationships? <nudge nudge, wink wink> (I made some general suggestion a page or two back, if you missed it.)

[Refplace]

Originally Posted by Talosian

Oh yeah. Humm... Okay, how about we say that they briefly met previously, and Jack tried to goad and harass him into a reaction, but Mr. H ignored him until he left. It can be an ongoing goal for Jack to get an emotional response from him XD

Sounds good, builds some rp potential in there

[Lamech]

Spoiler:  

Inspiration
The spell inspiration let's those under its sway fight harder and better. Despite the fact that to the reciepients the spell feels like a mental burden is being lifted and their drive is renewed the effects are physical. ST, DX and HT are all increased, but no more than by 30%. This spell does affect temporary HP and FP totals increasing and decreasing by the same amounts as HT and ST when the spell is cast and ended.
Effects: Lesser Strength Body*3, Area of Effect, Altered Traits, +ST/DX/HT
Typical Casting Lesser Strength Mind*3, [9] 1 Yard Radius [2], 300 lbs [3], 1 month [11] +3 ST/HT/DX [120] Total=145

Brilliance
The people caught in this spells effect are simply put smarter, and more able to see through and withstand coercion or manipulation. The effects aren't hugely obvious. You simply pick out details more often, see through the used carman, or make the logical leap. You almost never have a word on the tip of your tongue. Its optimizing your current brain so you can always be at the top, not letting you accomplish things you couldn't.
Effects: Lesser Strengthen Mind*3, Area of Effect, Altered Traits +IQ/Per/Will
Typical Casting Lesser Mind*3, [9] 1 Yard Radius [2], 300 lbs [3], 1 month [11] +4 IQ/Per/Will [120] Total=145

Brew Healing Potion
This ritual is a simple one that allows the caster to create a healing potion for later consumption. The effects are immediate and obvious, wounds close, bones knit together, and blood is refilled. This an even regenerate lost limbs, or similar crippling wounds if the injury can be completely healed by the potion. The spell can be made into other alchemical items besides just potions. Salves are also common.
Effects: Greater Restore Body, Lesser Create Magic, Healing, Altered Traits: Regrowth
Typical Casting: Greater Restore Body [4] Lesser Create Magic [6], Healing 3d+2, [10] Regrowth [10] Weight [3] Cost=33*3=99

Terrify II
This spell creates horrid frights in the victims mind forcing them to make two fear checks with a penalty equal to their margin of failure on their resistance roll.
Effects: Lesser Control Mind*2
Typical Casting Lesser Control Mind*2 [10] Range 50 yrds [8]

Form of the Angel
The target of this spell transforms their entire body, gaining two powerful wings from their back and their entire appearance changing to be more "ideal", or in game terms gaining levels of appearance. The wings' feathers glow softly in the dark, but as the light gets brighter they glow brighter as well letting the light be seen even in conditions as bright as day. Physicists are not entirely sure how someone stays aloft and are sure it should burn huge amounts of energy, but it doesn't. Especially when the user hovers.
Effects, Greater Transform Body, Altered Traits: Flight (Winged), Appearance, Increased Air Move
Typical Casting: Greater Transform Body [8], Altered Traits Flight (Winged) [30] Beautiful [12], Increased Air Move 5 [10] Weight 300 lbs [3], Accessory: Lights! [1] Duration: 1 day [9]

Armor of the Beserker
Drawn from the ancient tradition of the beserker, men and women can fight under its effects ignoring even fairly serious wounds or blows. Even while it protects them, to all but the most well trained eye it seems the attacks do as much damage as they should, but the victim fights on uneffected. Some stories tell of warriors who are struck by countless spears and arrows, piercing into their flesh while they fight as if unpained and whole of body.
Effects: Greater Strengthen Body [3] DR: Tough Skin, Absorbition+100%, No Sig+20% 9/level. Area of Effect
Typical Casting: Greater Strengthen Body [3], Weight 300lbs [2], Duration 1 month [11], Area of Effect 2yrds [2], 7 DR, (Absorption+100%, Tought Skin, No Sig) [63] Total: 81*3=243

Luck
This spell does exactly what it says. Makes everyone affected by it lucky. In game terms it grants the luck advantage. Simple.
Effects: Lesser Restore Chance, Altered Traits: Luck, Area of Effect
Typical Casting: Lesser Restore Chance [4], Area of Effect: 2 yrds [2] Weight [3] Altered Traits Luck [15], Duration: 1 month [11] Total: 35

Stay Safe
This spell grants a bit of safety. In the heat of battle people don't have the time to make perfect plans so need to rely on luck and intuition when defending themselves. By making sure luck is in their favour the targets have a much better chance of defending themselves.
Effects: Lesser Control Luck [5], Bestow A Bonus: Broad, all defense rolls, Area of Effect
Typical Casting: Lesser Control Luck [5], All Defense Rolls+3 [20] 2 yrd radius [2] Weight [3] Duration 3 months [13] Total: 43

Repair:
Very few people always have the parts, skills or tools on hand to repair all objects. Hence the invention of this spell. The targetted object is repaird, restoring some of the damage. A completely destroyed object can't be repaired, but otherwise essentially any damage can be fixed.
Effects: Greater Restore Matter [4] Healing
Typical Casting Greater: Restore Matter [4] Healing 3d [8] Weight: 3000lbs [5] Total Cost=17*3=51


Harden:
The duribility of the target object increases significantly, in game terms this means up to 100% extra DR and up to 100% extra HP. Commonly used on armor to protect the wearer.
Effects: Lesser Strengthen Matter, Altered Traits Increased HP, DR
Typical Casting: Lesser Strengthen Matter [3] Weight 100 lbs [2] Increased DR 5 [25] Increased HP 5 [10] Duration 1 month [11] Total Cost 51

Here is the spell list in full. Yeah ideas!

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Equip:
Ranged Weapons-4280$ total
Weapon Damage Acc Range Weight RoF Shots ST Bulk Rcl Cost Notes
SniperRifle,7.62mm:7dpi:5+3:1,000/4,200:15/1:1:10+1(3):11B†:-6:3:$2,350/$9($50):[2]
AssaultRifle,5.56mm:5dpi:5:800/3,500:8.9/1:13:30+1(3):8†:-5:2:$850/$15($34):
10 clips each-1080$

Melee Weapons-22100$ total
Two Holy, Balanced, Very Fine, Titanium, Silver-Coated Katanas
Weapon Damage Reach Parry Cost Weight ST Notes
Katana sw+1 cut 1,2 0 $650 5 11
or thr+1imp 1 0 11
Katana sw+3 cut 1,2 0 $10400 3.75
11 Holy, Balanced, Very Fine, Titanium, Silver-Coated
or thr+3imp 1 0 11 Holy, Balanced, Very Fine, Titanium, Silver-Coated

Magic Tools 18k:
Worskspace Kit, Basic 3k
Alchemical Kit, Good 15k

Grimoires: 33.75k
Inspiration+6 3.5k
Brilliance+6 3.5k
Brew Healing Potion Formulary+7 3.75k
Form of the Angel+6 3.5k
Armor of the Beserker+7 7.5k
Luck+5 1.5k
Stay Safe+6 3.5k
Harden+6 3.5k
Repair+6 3.5k

Now I just need to figure out some armour and the equipment is done.

And I'll look at it tonight.

[the_matrix_walker]

I could see Marcus having worked with any of the other PC's on previous hunts.

The Hermit: I could definitely see them as friends, and would like it if it could be pre-established that the Hermit is an ally and his current "Ritual Guy" when he needs one.

Jack Brown: I could see them being friends if the pranks were minimal... If he seriously pranks Marcus hard enough for him to lose his temper, Marcus is likely to suck the brownie out of him.

Randal Kane: Share a love for the hunt! I could see them back to back taking out vamp nests ;)

Brother Man: Has an intolerance for "his kind" so not much chance of a close relationship there, though he might be quite interested in how Marcus can seemingly turn monsters into mortals! I could envision him seeking Marcus out for that reason.

Lara Knight: It would be cool to know her as an occasional contact and fellow hunter.

[ericthered]

PC Roster:

Hermit:
stats
spells, standard spells

Marcus Savage:
stats
gear
background
description of sense

Randal Kane:
sheet
story first draft
complete sheet
insider contacts
final sheet

Brother Manuel Prys:
initial Draft
potential allies
background
gear

Laura Night:
fluff(old)
stats(old)
newer draft
spells
more spells

Jack Brown:
sheet
template Proposal

[the_matrix_walker]

I had plenty of cash left, so I have upgraded his Esoteric Medicine kit to Fine quality. I hope there is no objection...

If anyone needs some grimiore cash, I'll happily buy them books for spells that will benefit the group.

I highly recommend one of our casters do a damage boosting spell. +4 damage becomes +2 per die, which would help anyone and make Marcus' crazy damage go into the truly ridiculous range when using Flying Leap or Power Blow.

[ericthered]

Talosian:
Enemy is fine. Delusion is excellent. Dual weapon attack fine. +1 CF for titanium fire arms is solid. don't discount invisible bank robberies just yet: a well placed illusion can hide the part where you duck in and out of the safe. Using the elven Lord's stolen silverware is a great idea. The empathy is a great idea.

Lamech Spell comments:

You probably shouldn't be boosting attributes with altered traits. You should be bestowing bonuses (HP and FP should use altered traits though). In the case of Inspiration it would be three broad bonuses, plus the altered traits. This spell can only give +1 without becoming a greater effect though, and can't add HP or FP -- though that can be done with a lesser strengthen body. weight is not included in the spell, as its a mental spell, not a physical one. Brilliance needs the bestow a bonus build and can loose the weight as well, as is a legal spell otherwise.

Terrify II is illegal due to the 'stacking spells' rule, though you could bestow a penalty or do something else to make it more effective.

The angel spell should include lesser strengthen energy. Otherwise its good.

Beserker needs a lesser restore body to use the absorption, and a lesser control magic to select where the power goes. Without the control magic first HP, then FP, then ER and RPM energy reserves are restored.

The other spells look good.