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Originally Posted by jacobmuller
Great idea.
I'd advise:
Against jargon, as did Noctrine (took me a minute to realise chargen wasn't a spelling error). You normally intro your TLAs so I'm assuming you've just used them in this draft for veteran feedback.
Use of GURPS official formulae (STxST/5)
Addressing the message inclusively, eg using We instead of You.
Better to edit the following:
If I were a "beginner", I'd be rather irate after reading that one, despite knowing the beginner you mean is the subject and not the reader. I'd prefer "but we don't want to get in that deep in an intro!"
New TLA: FNG = Fab New GURPSers - the people we all love to meet.
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I just pick them up as I witness them being used by other people.
I was not using ST×ST/5 to emphasize the math aspect of its scariness. Did I overdo it?
What's wrong about 'beginner', more exactly?
Sorry for all the grammar errors - I'm a bit sleepy, and this is a rough draft anyway. Thanks for pointing them out.