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Old 11-28-2014, 10:47 AM   #34
TheOneRonin
 
Join Date: Oct 2010
Default Re: Torn Victor [Recruitment]

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Originally Posted by ladyarcana55 View Post
I have been working on my character. I don't quite have numbers yet, hopefully soon. But here is a tentative background story. If you need me to change anything, that won't be a problem. I kept thing generic to make it easy to make changes. Let me know if this works.
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Ariella “Lioness” Zarzecki

Growing up in Israel has always been anything but boring. The perpetual sense of caution and fear one gets used to over time. Even the bombings can become a common occurrence, a way the human mind rectifies a terrible situation. But it did not take long for Ariella to grow tired of the fear she felt and saw around her. She swore she would live up to her name and be the Lioness who would protect her people and her homeland.

When it was time for her to serve in the IDF, she did not hesitate. She was eager to take her place among the heroes who did much to protect their people. She excelled in her studies and her training and rose in rank quickly. Then came the day she put in her papers to petition to join the Sayeret. Though she was overjoyed to be accepted, her family couldn’t help but worry.

She was fearless and focused. She soaked in everything she was taught like a sponge and the more she learned the more she hated the terrorists who would attack and destroy innocent people. The more she hated them, the more determined she was to stop them, by whatever means necessary.

Then came her first mission. It was more successful than anyone had expected. No one among the enemy ever guessed Israel would send a woman to do a man’s job so it was very easy for her to move about, and the birqa made disguises and make up a non-issue.

Since then she has had many other successful missions. She has found and identified threats, hide outs, and weapons bunkers among other things. Those that were not captured or destroyed by IDF forces were destroyed by her. In time her gender became known among those of her field and many learned to be wary lest they come to the Lioness of Israel’s attention.

She has had the honor of serving and protecting Israel for 20 years. But now her superiors have informed her that it is time for her to stalk her prey where ever they may hide, anywhere in the world. And so, here she is. Ready for whatever happens.

That looks really good. No changes necessary.

One thing I'd like to see is a timeline of significant events. It doesn't have to be super detailed, or even give exact dates...years are fine. Things like Birth, military join date, significant training or operational events, etc. If your characters have families (most should) some details about parents, siblings, spouses, and children will all help flesh out the characters.

The more details you guys give me, the better job I can do at connecting you to the world.

Also, I should be able to throw some significant time at getting the Specialty lenses assembled and up on this thread. Keep in mind that those are optional, and there should already be enough for you guys to build your characters mechanically.
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